torsdag 6 oktober 2011

Date at McDonald's

Emma was lying on her bed reading a book when she got a textmessage. She was surprised and she took her mobile phone and read it. The text was from Daniel, the cute guy with dark curly hair and big brown eyes. He was asking if she wanted to meet him at McDonalds tonight. Emma texted back!

Hi Daniel!
Yes, let’s meet at 18 o'clock.
se you<3


Daniel got the text just after he had sent away one to Emma. He and his twin brother Ben should make up a trick on her.
”Are you ready?? What did she answer? Ben screamed from the hall.
Daniel didn’t want Ben to know that he really liked this girl and that she had written a heart in the textmessage. If he could he should say no to Ben’s plan but, then he could think that he didn’t dare to hurt a girl...!
”Uhmmm... She said yes, you can meet her outside McDonald's in fifteen minutes!

Emma was waiting outside McDonald's. The clock was five past six. He was five minutes late, five minutes! That was not a good start on theire first date. She really liked Daniel, and she hoped that he liked her back. Emma checked her face in the little mirror that she held in her hand. The lipgloss that she had put on her lips was shining and she looked very cute.
And there he was, so handsome!
”Come, sit here!!” Emma said with her softest voice.
Daniel looked a bit nervous but he sat down beside her.
”What would you like to eat? I think I will take a cheese-hamburger, and.... a coke!”
”Hmmm, I don’t know, perhaps a chicken-burger. Yes, a chicken-burger! I can order that, Daniel!”She left the table and went to the queue.

Daniel looked around in the big cafeteria at all the peoples. It smelled cheese and meat: this was a wonderful smell, if you asked Ben. Many of them were stressed, but he was here on a tricky date! He knew that Daniel was sitting outside waiting until Emma should ran out. They had done this trick before on there friends, but this time Daniel wasn’t as exited as he always was.

In the middle of his thughts Emma came back with two big burgers and one big coke.
”So, why did you want to meet me? There was a reason, right?”
”Eehh, not really....!” He saw that Emma got hurted so he was quick with his next line. ” I, just wanted to see you”. He smiled, and Emma smiled back.

This was the best date Emma ever had gone to, and actually the only, but still: a really nice date! Daniel was so cute, and he was so clever, just the kind of guy that Emma liked. And his eyes were so deep dark, like an ocean! She looked at Daniels face: the hair, his nose, the eyes, the red lips and the chin.
The chin!!!!! There was a scar on Daniel’s chin, just like the on that Ben had. Emma slowly realised the ugly true about who was sitting there beside her: It was Ben!!
”Oh my god! You are Ben...! What a silly thing to, you fool! I never want to see you again!”

1 kommentar:

  1. Good content, word knowledge and grammar.

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